Setting The Stage
This poem that I will read to you is called The Faucet.
It’s about this lonely faucet on top of a hill who watches happy people who don’t bother to walk up the hill to collect water from it.
This poem is based on a painting from the high school art show. The painting really touched me so that’s why I used it as something to brainstorm ideas from.
In this poem, I choose to not use punctuation because I wanted to keep this poem a slow paced poem so that the emotion slowly becomes stronger and stronger.
As a poet, I want instill the feeling of hope and at the same time pity to the people who hear or read my poem.
The Faucet
Plop Plop
the leaking faucet
dripping in the distance
is waiting for someone
to collect its water
What no one knows
is that this faucet
is filled with water as smooth
as a white marble floor
and as clear
as the sky on a warm
sunny day
It waits all day long
for someone to turn
its shiny tap
so that it can bring water
for everyone to drink
Everyday
the faucet just waits there
doing nothing
hoping for someone to come
But no one
will ever
come
TIME
T- Stanzas: I have 5 stanzas.
Line Breaks: I used line breaks in my poem to slow down the poem to build emotion.
I- Similes: I used similes to describe how smooth and clear the water is.
M- Onomatopoeia: I used onomatopoeia to describe the sounds of the dripping water.
E- Strong feelings: I tried to add strong feelings to the poem to give the audience a sense of hope and pity.
Blogpost
I learned a lot during the poetry unit. First of all, I learned about the TIME chart. This helps us make our poems better poems. An example of me using an aspect of TIME in my poem was when I used line breaks. In the poem I wrote, "and clear (line break) as the sky on a warm sunny day". Another thing I learned was onomatopoeia and how using it can make your poem better, for example "Plop Plop". Finally, I learned about similes and how to use them effectively. An example of me using similes is "filled with water as smooth as a white marble floor" and "as a white marble floor".
To come up with the idea for this poem, I looked at a painting that really created a feeling for me. Then, I just brainstormed anything this painting makes me feel. From then I just wrote the poem with the mood the painting gave me and the ideas I wrote down from looking at the painting. My poem evolved while improving and revising it. Some changes I made to my version one was that I cut some of the extra non important words. Then in version two, I made sure that my poem made sense and added in some words to make it sound better. I also put in line breaks to change the way the reader would read my poem. With the line breaks, I feel that my poem is more emotional than without line breaks. Finally, in version three, I added some TIME aspects to my poems. I added similes and made some minor changes the line breaks so that I could publish my poem. I hope that my readers will feel the two emotions; hope and pity.
