The Big Accident
It was a normal day. I was at a playdate at Adventure Cove having fun with my brother and two of his friends, until the big accident.
I was in line to slide down a slide at the Big Bucket Tree House. Water was dripping from the wet ropes holding the playground together. I looked at the line in front of me and behind me.
“Three more people,” I informed Justin, my brother. He nodded his head in reply.
My brother just got of the slide and out of the way. I looked at my hands and saw multiple scratches from ropes on the playground. I knew more scratches were coming. But I didn’t know that once I get off the slide, Adventure Cove would be over for me.
The lifeguard told me that it was safe to slide and so I sat down and let go of the bars above the start of the slide. Since my swimsuit wasn’t slippery, I had to use my hands to push myself down the slide. Once I got far enough that I could get up and walk to the exit, I got up. I quickly walked so I could catch up the rest. The exit was about a meter away, when I slipped.
I tried to get up and walk but I couldn’t. The only option was to get on my belly and use my hands to drag myself to the exit. I looked around to see if there was a seat I could sit on. When I saw a seat, I stopped looking around and squinted my eyes to double check that it was a seat.
Justin and his two friends continued playing at the Big Bucket Tree House while I sat on the edge of the pool, clueless of what I should do. I tried to walk but I couldn’t. I started to call Justin. “Justin!” I shouted as loud as I could.
Justin screamed back, “What!”
“Come here!” I told him because I didn’t want to shout out what happened.
“Wait!” Justin replied, “I’m playing with my friends!”
He went up the treehouse to slide down the slide again. He was so far away that if I shouted again, he wouldn’t hear it. The second he touched the playground floor, I screamed, “Come here!”
“Wait!” Justin said, becoming annoyed.
He went up the treehouse again to slide down the slide again. I can’t move and can’t call Justin! What should I do? I asked myself. Another minute of hard thinking has gone by and I thought of calling Ryan, Justin’s friend.
“Ryan” I called Ryan.
He came.
“I can’t walk.” I told him.
“Ok” Ryan said and walked away.
The same thing happened again, he didn’t help me! I felt so annoyed that tears started falling out of my eyes. I wiped the first few tears and I kept the rest of the tears in my eye. I just needed someone to tell my mom.
Before long, Ryan told my mom about me. My mom came over and got a lifeguard to help me. The lifeguards got a medic and the medic checked the injury to see if it minor or major. It was a minor injury. Even though Adventure Cove was over for me, I was and still am really thankful that it was just a minor accident. Now the next time I think of rushing, I know that it doesn’t always help. Thanks to my sprained ankle.
I loved this writing because I could relate. In third grade I broke my leg in the pool. I only have one more thing for you. Put some more action because before the slip you really did not write about it.
ReplyDeleteThanks for writing this story it really touched me.
That was a great story, you used good discription and no fancy font to distract you! This story was really good. Your word choice was also really awesome.
ReplyDeleteIt was a great story I liked the story line. You have to slow down the moment. It happened too fast, so I couldn't really get a good sense of what happened. You also have to add a little more action to your piece.
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